} This poem is incredible. I mean, I have never seen such an
} in-depth evaluation into pure nothingness before. It leaves
} the reader with a sense of emptiness, and the reader can truly
} feel the poet's pain.
} Technically, the poem is flawless. There are no questionable
} line breaks to confuse the reader. There are no questionable
} word choices in other to make the reader pause. In other
} words, there is nothing that leaves the reader questioning the
} poem itself and the poet's method of writing the poem. So the
} poem flows from word to word, from line to line extremely
} well. This is heightened by the lack of punctuation.
} One thing that must be mentioned is the repetition. I find it
} extremely effective, since it echoes the poet's sentiments
} without becoming tiresome or annoying. In line seven, the poet
} which echoes a similar idea of line 2. However, the repetition
} of this idea is necessary, since the reader goes off a slight
} tangent beginning in line 4, and needs to be drawn back into
} the poem. The final repetition of this idea (occurring in the
} last line), helps to tie the entire poem together.
} As for the meaning of the poem, I think it's about the
} essential struggle of one man in modern society and his
} attitudes towards love and death. The poet almost gives us a
} sense of hopelessness and despair, but there is also an
} underlying theme of hope which can be seen in line 5.
} As for things I do not like about the poem, there are very
} few. I'm wondering if line 3 is really essential to the poem.
} While it is very interesting, it does not seem to fit the mood
} of the rest of the poem. Also, I would like to see a stanza
} break after line 5. The poem seems to start in a different
} direction after this line, and I think it would make the poem
} truly great to see it divided up into two separate thoughts, so
} to speak.
} Also, I would like to see a title. I mean, although the poem
} is extremely engaging as it is, I think a title would help to
} root me into the poem and give me some sense of where it is
} going before I read it. However, I am a little wary of this
} point, because an inadaquate title could destroy the entire
} mood of the poem.
} Very nice. Good use of white space.